Kia ora, I am a student at New Brighton Catholic School, Welcome - Haere Mai. This is a place where I will be able to share my learning with you. Please note my work may include spelling or other errors because some of it will be my first drafts. I would like to get your feedback - comments, thoughts, questions and ideas to help me Learn Create Share.
Tuesday, 23 June 2020
Snippet of my narative
He jumped but at that moment he got tased! He just got the parachute open but he lost control and passed out. He was rushed to hospital and 4 weeks later he had 96 stitches in his face from the fall and the glass! He is in a coma because he hit his head so hard that a rock would break. He had a massive gash on his eyebrow and deep cuts because he landed on some glass.
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Hi Max I really like your snippet I can't wait to see the narrative
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